Talk:Gears of War: Hidden Desires

Intrigued
Hello there ^_^.

I have just started reading Hidden Desires (I am up to Chapter 6) and am finding myself very intrigued indeed. An interesting concept and I'm curious as to where the idea of gems with powers came from for you? A priestess makes absolute sense and so far I'm enjoying your take on each character. My only negative critique would be to nudge you to run through some spelling and grammar edits at some point and think about whether you want it written in first person current tense or third person past, because it does swap between the two at times.

Other than that, I'm looking forward to reading more when I'm not so tired. One thing I did notice when I looked at your fic a few months ago now (but didn't start reading it then due to being too busy) was that your chapter lengths are the type that will allow me to catch up and keep up along the way as you go. Btw, great point on the Reavers being the Locust version of a horse... never thought of it that way. Nice. In my fic I have a different take on what they are to the Locust entirely but I do like this version immensely too ^^.

Cheers,

--Mana4X2 10:26, March 11, 2011 (UTC)